Be inclined to do sth. = cling to do sth. = intend to do sth. = be apt to do / aptly do sth.
一种比较简单易行的对比/类比:The former…the latter…
To sum up, the automobile helps illustrate that when a luxury becomes a necessity it can sap(注意此位gre常考单词) our independence and strength as individuals. Perhaps our society is better off, on balance, with such "luxuries" after all, the automobile industry has created countless jobs, raised our standard of living, and made the world more interesting. However, by becoming slaves to the automobile we trade off(= sacrifice) a certain independence and inner strength.
此文章得分应该是>5分了。为什么?首先,头尾都不错;其次,全文无太多的语法错误,表意清晰,举例恰到好处;再次,分析手法运用了不完全否定的同意的辩论方式,这是最保守的做法。